Fluorescent lights drone and drainpipes trickle
above me, blanket me,
metronomes keeping time
with whatever it is
that ticks inside me.
I give myself over to their rhythm,
let my mind float
through the air above, flavoured
with monotony;
it wanders—my mind—aimlessly
at first, wafting in a sea
of nothing, waiting
for the waves to come.
And they do come:
wave after wave of thoughts
crash on the shores of my mind—vying for my attention,
evangelical in their resolve, arguing their cases,
proving their profundity, desiring
to be nurtured and expounded.
And when the right one crashes,
lasting just long enough
for me to frolic in the wash, the one
that has always been there, somewhere,
I savour it:
the feeling,
the sensation,
the excitement;
I capture it,
run with it,
bottle it up,
take it
back to the present, back to reality,
let it take over my mind
completely, bask
in the severity of
the connection,
the epiphany.
Then I pick up my pen
and let it run riot
until my desires
are sated.
Your words are eloquent and amazing! Caro
Gosh I love the language and fluidity of this piece, more so the content! So beautiful 🙂
I like this. It’s so… lyrical.
The words dance.
Ohh, the title of this poem speaks to me so much. May I use it as a line in one of my own poems/as a title of a short story? With credit to you, of course 🙂
Of course you can 🙂 Thanks for reading. I’m quite happy it resonates with you.
wah! i like your blog! like, where have i been? haha. gr8 piece this one!.
You’ve successfully captured the fickle and sometimes mindbreakingly difficult “process” of writing in a highly unique, creative and visual fashion… I just wanted to say well done, this blog and your words are a pleasure to read and very thought-provoking.
Aw, gawsh. Thank you so much. They’re all quite very lovely compliments. I can’t thank you enough for them. I’ve tried having a look through yours but on a phone, it’s proving difficult. I’ll be sure to have a proper look through as soon as I get the chance 🙂
Please do I’d welcome your feedback 🙂 it’s rare to find somebody whose writing is so raw yet eloquent so the compliments aren’t too difficult to come up with!
It is like looking in the mirror with these words. Love this piece.
“…evangelical in their resolve”: elegant!
I can identify with this – how great when the right idea clicks and pours out on paper. (But it’s equally frustrating when the thought dissipates leaving only a vague sense of having missed the best idea ever 🙂 )
Thanks for reading 🙂 Gah, it’s so damn frustrating when something pops into your head at the most inconvenient time! Mental notes don’t always stick, unfortunately.
Very clever poem. I feel that the third stanza is when the rhythm and the magic really start. The first two stanzas set the tone, but the third one starts it all. Nice!
Why, thank you 🙂 I’m glad it worked out that way. Had no idea it read like that when I was writing/editing, but I’m happy nonetheless. Thanks for reading and taking the time to comment.
The first stanza prepares the reader well for the second where, for me, the central motif lies, a philosophy i very much subscribe to of becoming part of the moment and then from the third stanza on the extended imagery of the water where doubts are banished when all comes right.
Jens, this is fine writing and i enjoyed thoroughly.
My best to you
john
Thank you for this, John. You just revealed more to me about my own poem than I knew. This is why I love sharing. So many different perspectives and revelations. I really appreciate you reading it and your comments.